Writing and Learning Assessment essay

Writingand Learning Assessment

1 Usingyour assignments, explainwhat two – four things your writing does well.&nbsp 1) Name eachitem from the rubric: 2) point to an example in an assignment 3)explain why the example is strong.

First,my transition is strong.&nbsp You can see this in the first sentenceof the third paragraph.&nbsp I think it is strong because it givesthe reader an overview of what they have already read in the previousparagraph.

Second,my argument is strong. You can see this is in the last sentence ofthe first paragraph. I think it is strong because it provides areader with a debatable, non-obvious, and provable claim.

Third,my organization is strong. You can see this in the introductionparagraph. I think it is strong because it orients the reader to theissue in question and end with a thesis statement.

Fourth,my conclusion is strong. You can see this in the last paragraph ofthe essay. I think it is strong because it tells the reader the stepsthey can take to overcome the challenges in their lives. It alsotells the reader the benefits of taking these steps.

2 Usingyour assignments, explainwhat two – four things could be improved.&nbsp 1) Name an item fromthe rubric: 2) point to an example in your assignments 3) explain whyit could be improved.

Ithink my writing could be improved in three ways.

First,my sources could be improved.&nbsp You can see this in the fifthparagraph. &nbspI think it could be improved because it does notstate from which book the information was retrieved from. Thus, it isnot clear to a reader where the information quoted in the second lineof the fifth paragraph comes from.

Second,my language could be improved. You can see this in the entire secondparagraph. &nbspI think it could be improved because it is toosimple to fit an audience that comprises of college students. Theentire second paragraph shows few vocabularies and does not meet thecomplexity expected of a college paper and this may make the essayunappealing to its reader.

Third,my supporting evidence could be improved. You can see this in theseventh line of the second paragraph. I think it could be improvedbecause I could have given a personal story to a reader about asituation where I chose an easy task while there was a complicatedone and ended up not gaining much.

3 Usingyour assignments, explain three specific things you chose to do, andwhy. (Examples: Why did you choose that example? Why did you choosethat transition?&nbsp Why did you choose that thesis?&nbsp Why didyou choose that conclusion?&nbsp Why did you put your naysayer whereyou did?&nbsp Why did you use that piece of evidence, or thatquote?&nbsp Why did you write that sentence the way you did, or usethat punctuation?)

First,I chose the example of a person failing in school because I felt itsupported the essay’s main point of not giving up and improving onone’s abilities by facing the challenges and not running away fromthem. You can see this in my last paragraph specifically in thesecond last sentence.

Second,I chose to the quote by Robinson on how he viewed his tragedy becauseI felt it demonstrated a positive attitude of viewing challenges asstepping stones. You can see this in the third paragraph.

Third,I chose the transitional word “apart from” because I wanted toconnect the ideas contained in the two paragraphs. You can see thisin my third paragraph.