Writingand Learning Assessment
1 Usingyour assignments, explainwhat two – four things your writing does well.  1) Name eachitem from the rubric: 2) point to an example in an assignment 3)explain why the example is strong.
First,my argument is strong.  You can see this in the second sentenceof the third paragraph.  I think it is strong because itprovides a reader with a specific and complex claim that is also themain idea conveyed throughout the essay.
Second,my conclusion is strong. You can see this in the last paragraph ofthe essay. I think it is strong because it offers a reader withsolutions to the different aspects of cultural competence.
Third,my organization is strong. You can see this in the fifth paragraph. Ithink it is great because it explores every aspect of the centralpoint separately. As such, it allows the reader to follow the paper’sarguments easily.
Fourth,my quotation is strong. You can see this in the fifth paragraph. Ithink it is great because I have given full credit to the authors bymentioning their names or organizations. Also, in the case ofnon-website sources, such as Tannen’s book, I have given the pagenumber to guide the reader in case they want to read more about theissue in question.
2 Usingyour assignments, explainwhat two – four things could be improved.  1) Name an item fromthe rubric: 2) point to an example in your assignments 3) explain whyit could be improved.
Ithink my writing could be improved in three ways.
First,my use of evidence could be improved.  You can see this in thefifth paragraph.  I think it could be improved because thesources are not well integrated into the essay. Some are placed atthe end of the paragraph, hence no explanation is offered to thereader on how they connect with the paper’s central point.
Second,my transitions could be improved. You can see this in the fourthparagraph. I think it could be improved because the transitionalwords used do not help the reader connect the ideas contained in thedifferent paragraphs.
Third,my use of a variety of sources could be improved. You can see this inthe last paragraph of the essay.  I think it could be improvedbecause a personal story or the use of pathos could have beeneffective in helping a reader understand what they stand to lose orgain if they follow the proposed guideline to becoming culturallycompetent.
3 Usingyour assignments, explain three specific things you chose to do, andwhy. (Examples: Why did you choose that example? Why did you choosethat transition?  Why did you choose that thesis?  Why didyou choose that conclusion?  Why did you put your naysayer whereyou did?  Why did you use that piece of evidence, or thatquote?  Why did you write that sentence the way you did, or usethat punctuation?)
First,I chose the conclusion because I needed to be specific when informingthe reader how each of the party I found not be culturally competentcan change on the three aspects of cultural competence. You can seethis in my last three paragraphs of the essay.
Second,I chose the statistics from the Gallup Center for Muslim Studiesbecause I wanted to make the reader understand the prevalence ofracial and religious prejudice in America. You can see this in mythird paragraph.
Third,I chose the example of the September 11, 2011 terrorist attackbecause I wanted the reader to identify with the topic by tellingthem about an incidence they are already familiar with.  You cansee this in my first paragraph specifically in the second sentence.